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prillalar ([personal profile] prillalar) wrote2008-03-09 08:46 pm

PoT Fic: Hit and Miss, InuKai

Hit and Miss by Hal
InuKai, 300 words.

"I miss you," Inui says and the phone nearly slips through Kaidoh's grasp. Kaidoh bends over, bracing one hand on his knee, catching his breath. It's been nearly six weeks since Inui called him.

"Senpai," he says, instead of hanging up.

"That's all I had to say." And Inui's gone. His photo is still on the screen, the one from the time they were in the sports store and Inui was going on about string gauge and tension and natural gut. He was surprised when Kaidoh took his picture.

Kaidoh puts away the phone. He has 3K left to run. Two blocks later, he cuts one street over and the light is on in Inui's bedroom. He finds a rock and arcs it up, too hard, maybe, and it clinks against the glass.

Inui comes to the window -- what's disturbing his important high school homework? -- and Kaidoh has another pebble in his fist. He looks up and Inui looks down. Inui waves. Kaidoh presses the stone against his palm.

He moves back into the shadows to wait. His phone buzzes against his thigh and he turns it off without looking. Inui jogs around the corner, pulling his arm into his jacket, pushing his glasses up his nose. Kaidoh steps forward, six weeks, you bastard curling in his fists.

"Kaidoh," Inui says and smiles, like he used to, his whole strange face gone soft and happy. It hurts Kaidoh like a tear in his skin, like the time he cut his ankle on a rusty can. He had to get a tetanus shot.

The stone falls from his hand and he grabs Inui around the chest, pushing his forehead into Inui's shoulder and biting his lip to stop the pain. Inui puts his hand on the back of Kaidoh's neck and his cheek against Kaidoh's hair.

"Why didn't you call me?" Inui says and Kaidoh holds on tighter.

[identity profile] pixxers.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 03:52 am (UTC)(link)
300 words were never so wonderful.

You make me love Kaidoh so much. ♥

[identity profile] waxrose.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 03:55 am (UTC)(link)
:((( They are seriously too cute together to ever be apart.

[identity profile] lynnmonster.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 03:57 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, heart.

[identity profile] geeksicle.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 03:57 am (UTC)(link)
Oh. God. <3

[identity profile] disutansu.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 04:11 am (UTC)(link)
And here I was going through LJ while internally screaming for ANYTHING to "save me from my literature homework!" I love you. ;-; Suddenly I feel rejuvenated and all achy inside (but a good kind of achy).

If people ever study the literature/fiction of the fandom years and years down the line, you should have your own anthology. *wants to take that class...*

Anyway, *rambling* it always amazes me how powerful you can make something in so few words. It impacts me... T-T

[identity profile] sleepingfingers.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 04:15 am (UTC)(link)
That's beautiful. This is the first InuKai fic I've read and you've made me want to go gobble up all the others. :)

[identity profile] reddwarfer.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 04:24 am (UTC)(link)
You always write this ship so fucking adorably.
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[identity profile] vissy.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 05:19 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, those two dorkheads.

[identity profile] cmere.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 05:21 am (UTC)(link)
ohhhhhhh so wonderful <333
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[personal profile] thawrecka 2008-03-10 05:50 am (UTC)(link)
Aw!

[identity profile] leviosa8.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 07:00 am (UTC)(link)
Yay! Good old InuKai!

[identity profile] histoirede.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 09:15 am (UTC)(link)
Sweet ^-^

[identity profile] marksykins.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 10:58 am (UTC)(link)
what's disturbing his important high school homework?

Oh Kaidoh, baby. *sigh*

Still love them best of all.

[identity profile] shikishi.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 11:17 am (UTC)(link)
You really do them so so well, Hal.

I've been holding out for the post finale fic. It's there, no one's written it yet.

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[identity profile] cellia.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 01:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Ah! So! Cute! :DDD

[identity profile] longleggedgit.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 03:51 pm (UTC)(link)
Agh. You always make this pairing hurt in just the right way. ♥

THE LAST LINE. Oh, oh. Boys. <333

[identity profile] reposoir.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 04:04 pm (UTC)(link)
You write InuKai so beautifully, Hal.

&hearts

[identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com 2008-03-11 12:04 am (UTC)(link)
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

*dead of inukai*

[identity profile] eternalsayonara.livejournal.com 2008-03-11 12:39 am (UTC)(link)
"Kaidoh," Inui says and smiles, like he used to, his whole strange face gone soft and happy.

I am gleeful as to how you describe Inui. <3

[identity profile] dame-batsie.livejournal.com 2008-03-11 01:45 am (UTC)(link)
For 300 words, this is terrific!

[identity profile] bloodstaindnght.livejournal.com 2008-03-11 01:51 am (UTC)(link)
*sigh*

If I have an OTP at all, it's them. *sappy grin*

[identity profile] candy-marie-55.livejournal.com 2008-03-11 03:49 am (UTC)(link)
oh, oh, oh, details plz. I MEAN SIX WEEKS WHY INUIII?

[identity profile] hyakuiro.livejournal.com 2008-03-11 04:31 am (UTC)(link)
oh kaidoh...♥♥♥

[identity profile] sixthwinemaiden.livejournal.com 2008-03-11 01:22 pm (UTC)(link)
ASL;DJAKL;SDJ EYAH! *flapples on desk and melts* Inu/Kai drabbles are always so much love - and you have written them so well within those 300 words. *___*

Thank you for sharing, Hal-san~! ♥

[identity profile] pchan02.livejournal.com 2008-03-12 01:39 am (UTC)(link)
loves it.

this pairing needs more love.

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