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prillalar ([personal profile] prillalar) wrote2007-02-28 10:58 pm
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PoT FIC: Hands (InuKai)

This isn't at all what I was expecting.

Hands by Halrloprillalar / [livejournal.com profile] prillalar
Prince of Tennis, InuKai, 600 words, PG.
Inui can't help himself.


They've been in Inui's room half an hour and Inui has already touched Kaidoh sixteen times. He can't help himself: a hand on Kaidoh's shoulder, fingers on his arm, knees bumping together. It's new to Inui, this itch under his skin, this impulse he can't control. He breathes a little faster, talks a little more, and his hands keep reaching out before he can pull them back.

Kaidoh doesn't notice. He hunches forward over the manual Inui gave him, eyes on the page, hands on the page. Inui bends down, closer to the skin over Kaidoh's collar, to the hair brushing his neck. He breathes in, body heat and fabric softener, and it sends a shiver through his chest and gut and groin.

His fingers stretch to hook under the collar, to slide down Kaidoh's throat, and Inui knows that's too much, it's not the way he should be touching Kaidoh, even once, but he wants it. His hands want it, his body wants it. Inui clenches his fingers into his palm, but they curl out again, Inui breathes in again, and he stops trying to stop.

Kaidoh turns his head. Inui stops. Kaidoh's face is five centimetres away, maybe four and a half. Inui can see the pores on Kaidoh's nose, the dent above his upper lip, an eyelash on his cheek. Blood fills Inui's head, his throat swells, he doesn't move. Kaidoh doesn't move. "Senpai," Kaidoh says, and his breath is hot on Inui's mouth.

Inui jerks back, pulls his hands in close to his body. Kaidoh hisses and hunches down again. He stares at the manual. His hands are fists. "Excuse me," Inui says, and leaves the room.

In the bathroom, he splashes water on his face and rubs it with a towel until it stings. He wants to go, to leave Kaidoh in his room and run. He stops outside the door and counts to fifty before he goes back in.

Kaidoh doesn't look up. Inui sits down on the floor, further away than before, and picks up the notes he's working on. He can hear Kaidoh breathing. He reads the same line four times. It makes no sense.

"Inui-senpai," Kaidoh says and Inui looks up. "This formation, could you..."

"What is it?" Inui says and Kaidoh lunges at him, grabs his shoulders, presses his mouth against Inui's. The notes crumple in Inui's hand. Kaidoh forces Inui back against the side of the bed, he kisses Inui again, pushing at Inui's lips until Inui opens his mouth.

Inui opens his mouth. He kisses back, his skin stinging all over, his arms trapped at his sides. He doesn't know what he's doing, he hasn't thought that far ahead, but he moves his mouth like Kaidoh does and feels a shout pressing at his lungs, trying to be heard.

Kaidoh pulls back, lets Inui go. Inui wipes his mouth with the back of his hand. "Kaidoh," he says and it's almost hard to talk with the smile that stretches his cheeks. "Where did you learn how to do that?"

Kaidoh's face goes red, his fists clench. He jumps up and scrambles for his bag, cramming his books inside it.

"Wait," Inui says, but Kaidoh goes, slamming the door like a slap in Inui's face. Inui doesn't run after him. He pulls his knees up to his chest, to keep it from opening up. He wonders who else Kaidoh's been kissing. He wonders if he cares.

Inui gets out his mobile and sends a text: I'm sorry. There's no reply.

The next day at school, Kaidoh asks Inui for advice on his serve. They work on it for most of the practice.

Inui keeps his hands to himself.

-fin-

Comments of any kind are always welcome.

[identity profile] akahannah.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 07:04 am (UTC)(link)
♥ ♥ ♥

You always manage to say so much about these two in so few words. I love the way you write them both. m(_ _)m

So where did Kaidoh learn to do that? ^_^

[identity profile] bouncy.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 08:15 am (UTC)(link)
Oh Inui. He should learn to keep his hands to himself. :D

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[identity profile] scoradh.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 08:36 am (UTC)(link)
I love no-impulse-control!Inui. It's so cute. But why no kissing at the end? D: I hope Inui's not going to pass up a chance to gain data on mutual sexual development or whatever ...

♥!

[identity profile] reposoir.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 09:28 am (UTC)(link)
His pillow, Inui! His pillow and no one else!

That was so sweet and wah inducing. I love your InuKai, Hal. &hearts

[identity profile] marksykins.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 11:58 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, Inui, why are you always such a complete dork? :( ♥ :( They'll work it out, right?

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[identity profile] shikishi.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 12:05 pm (UTC)(link)
I like to believe that yes, Kaidoh would smell like fabric softner.

[identity profile] thirdshade.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 01:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, Inui. Your poor boyfriend just wanted some sugar. D:

[identity profile] leviosa8.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 01:27 pm (UTC)(link)
You are a master of the building-up, but lately your stories leave me a bitter aftertaste. Maybe because the boys tend to make things unnecessarily complicated (Momo and Horio, the bug story, this one). Maybe because I am too simple and like my happy endings. Maybe because I dislike angst, over a certain amount. Maybe because you can do just these many things with the same couple over and over again.

But the thing is that I loved it until Kaidoh ran away. This calls for a sequel : ) Or not, if you wanted to leave it at that.

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[identity profile] don-amoeba.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 01:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Ouch Inui, you really shouldn't have said that.

But lovely story, as always! Awkward young love at its best. :D

[identity profile] karadin.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 02:11 pm (UTC)(link)
more more more. :D

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[identity profile] disutansu.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 03:03 pm (UTC)(link)
Aw... the ending leaves me with an ache. *squishes them both* Hopefully it'll work out between them.

*rushes off to class*

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[identity profile] slinkiestumble.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 04:46 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh Inui, insert foot into mouth much? That boy, no sense sometimes and such a (granted, lovable, but still) dweeb. And Kaidoh...

[identity profile] knw.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 06:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Poor Inui, he's such a dork. I do love how teenage you make them.

[identity profile] phoichique.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 06:59 pm (UTC)(link)
I only open my mouth to switch my feet. Inui, oh Inui.

I like this. And in response to the whole bitter versus sweet discussion. I think... as nice sweet fluff fics are- they tend to repeat themselves across the fandom. I enjoy what you write, bitter or not, simply because your take on these two is so unique. *blather*

In short: I liked this, as per usual.

[identity profile] happiestwhen.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 07:59 pm (UTC)(link)
I loved the ending of this one. It's sort of exactly the tone I'd want with these two, the hanging-in-limbo feeling and frustration.

He pulls his knees up to his chest, to keep it from opening up.

:( :( ♥
venivincere: (Inui)

[personal profile] venivincere 2007-03-01 08:40 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm in pain from the angst, here. I want a kiss-filled resolution. WAAAH! It's amazing how, in just 600 words, you managed to become the Cruise Director of my emotions. :-D

[identity profile] sakurashadow59.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 08:54 pm (UTC)(link)
*sighs* Boys. They're so dumb sometimes. I loved this. It was absolutely wonderful. ♥

[identity profile] bloodyteaspoon.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 09:57 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow. ♥
The last line... -sighs- ♥♥

[identity profile] meretricula.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 10:24 pm (UTC)(link)
aww, poor Inui! though it wouldn't kill him to learn to watch his tongue. =P

[identity profile] darth-claire.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 10:44 pm (UTC)(link)
Poor Inui. Proof that brains are no match for love and hormones.

[identity profile] waxrose.livejournal.com 2007-03-01 11:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Awwww. Inui, you idiot. ♥ I like the unresolved-ness of this.

It's a weird kink, but I have a particular weakness for texting in fanfics.

[identity profile] pixxers.livejournal.com 2007-03-02 01:14 am (UTC)(link)
Now don't you feel better? I know I do. :D Where's the Airu Suppuri?

Mmm, always such wonderful kissing.

[identity profile] grasshopper.livejournal.com 2007-03-02 03:30 am (UTC)(link)
I think I said this before, about Point C, but I love it when you imply that Kaidoh has more experience than his partner, or just more experience than people might expect. Not that I think he gets around or anything, and in my head he's a big believer in True Love, but just. There's something so achy about the idea, I don't know why, maybe because it's such an intriguing counterpoint to the true love thing. Also, who taught him to kiss? Was it Fuji. Momo? Can it please be Renji. God, I will be thinking about this all day.

And Inui's compulsion to touch. Perfectly understandable, everyone wants to touch Kaidoh, but I especially love it when Inui when he can't control himself. *_* Oh, oh, and Kaidoh taking initiative! I love that. He would go after what he wants, not sit there blushing while Inui tied him to the bedposts. :)



[identity profile] a-drawer-4ever.livejournal.com 2007-03-02 06:41 am (UTC)(link)
Wow.

Just... wow.

It's perfect.

And I don't like it.

But it's still perfect.

O-O; I don't know how you do it but in 600 words you twist my gut like most 600 PAGE books can't dream of doing.

"...his skin stinging all over..."
perfect imagery. Just perfect.

"He doesn't know what he's doing, he hasn't thought that far ahead..."
This made me smile, so ... teenage. ;x;

And even though I hate the way it's bitter at the end. It has to be bitter, that's what makes it perfect.... o-o; I think.

thank you very much for writting it! It's muchly awesome! *hands cookies*

[identity profile] cellia.livejournal.com 2007-03-02 07:01 am (UTC)(link)
Poor Inui! Poor Kaidoh! (though I do like him "taking the lead" sometimes)

In my heart, I know that this is secretly an excerpt from a convoluted FujiKai Epic.

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