As time goes by.

[prillalar]

Christ, how can I be expected to think up different ways to describe kisses all the time? (And, you know, other goings on.) Especially trying to make up some sort of original but not really, really stupid metaphor.

I'm starting to write stuff like:

* Inui felt like a bunch of mice were nibbling on his liver and tickling the underside of his skin with their fur.

* It reminded Inui of the last time he'd had the flu: he was hot, shaking, weak.

* One time Inui had opened up his computer monitor to try to fix a bad connection that made the screen flicker and he'd touched the wrong thing and gotten an electric shock that threw him back across the room, every centimeter of his skin tingling and every hair on his body standing on end. This kiss was just the same but without the scorched smell.

* Soft. Soft and hard and hot and wet and burning and icy and up and down and north and south and dry and happy and sad and did he mention burning?

* It was what Inui always thought teleportation would be like, every particle in his body torn apart and put back together, only everything was different afterwards.

* It was nice. Like yoghurt. Inui liked yoghurt.

Hmm. Maybe I should take a break.

Comments

[neeteeus.livejournal.com]

Inui felt like a bunch of mice were nibbling on his liver and tickling the underside of his skin with their fur.

...ow. That hurt my brain. Mental images!

[prillalar]

Good thing I didn't use that one in the actual story!

[mooselet.livejournal.com]

I really, seriously like what you've done here. I wouldn't change a thing. : D

[prillalar]

Hee! I'll keep them on the list then. *g*

[meemobunny.livejournal.com]

i think kiss#3 is rather original in a very entertaining sort of way. :D ooh, and #6 -- very simple and er, symbolic-like. *nods*

[prillalar]

*laugh* You got the hidden symbolism!

[chzbrgr-of-doom.livejournal.com]

I just aviod describing kisses because I am a cheater >D

[prillalar]

*g*

[katie-m.livejournal.com]

It was nice. Like yoghurt. Inui liked yoghurt.

Best kiss ever!

[prillalar]

I'll be sure to use that one, then. *g*

[svz-insanity.livejournal.com]

It was nice. Like yoghurt. Inui liked yoghurt.

Make it strawberry-banana yogurt and I'm sold. :D

I tend to avoid describing kisses. ^^' I suck at them.

[prillalar]

*laugh* I don't know what Inui's favourite yoghurt flavour is, though. Hmm.

Man, meet my Sex Scene Block...

[kormantic.livejournal.com]

Your Kiss Block should totally hang out with him after school.

Re: Man, meet my Sex Scene Block...

[prillalar]

I've got a Sex Scene Block too. It's a whole Goings On Block. We'll have a Block Party!

loling!

[unearthly-calm.livejournal.com]

umm...I rather like the last one ^_^

Akshi.

Re: loling!

[prillalar]

Hee! I guess it depends on your feelings about yoghurt.

[xsmoonshine.livejournal.com]

There, there should be lots more kisses like these. The world would be a better place!

[prillalar]

Aw, I feel all warm and fuzzy now.

[katherine-15.livejournal.com]

It was what Inui always thought teleportation would be like, every particle in his body torn apart and put back together, only everything was different afterwards.

*squees happily* I really LIKED that one!

[mitethe.livejournal.com]

These are great! XD

(Man, why is it that fictional characters get all the best kisses?)

[prillalar]

Because they always brush their teeth.

[http://users.livejournal.com/_inbetween_/]

Oh yeah. There sadly is no infinite number of describing that, although ... *g* I am so far gone that I think half of these are pretty good.

[prillalar]

Hee! Well, they're *different* anyhow.

[chinawolf.livejournal.com]

*laughs and laughs* Yeah, a break sounds good, unless you're writing crackfic. ♥

[prillalar]

Yes, I think I managed to keep anything like this out of the fic itself by trapping these here in this post.

[deepfryerfire.livejournal.com]

You know, there is a series of folders on my comp called 'The Wrong Trousers', in which I have cropped out and saved horrible lines from various fic. There's maybe only one or two up there on that list that I wouldn't have considered adding to that collection.

Yes, it's time to take a break. ^_^

[prillalar]

I should save these for badfic, then. :)

[cellia.livejournal.com]

I love the transporter one actually, because geeks actually do think things like that, often quite seriously (um, not that I would know or anything *shifty eyes*). It does break the story's mood pretty quickly though, unless you're writing humor. One of those real life things that are too unbelievable for fiction maybe?

Now I am wondering if Inui is at all a fannish type. Yes, he likes math and nerdy things, but does this mean he reads SF and suchnot? hm. There is no indication in the series, and yet it is very rare I meet a nerdy (especially math-type) person who does not read SF and watch Stargate etc etc.