Actually, I'd be interested in hearing it, because, much as I thought this short was *great,* that was the one thing that niggled at me. The rescuer of damsels in distress and kind to frosh Momo-chan-senpai... a cheat?

Very tightly written, and *wah* I felt for poor Kaidoh, and could rationalize "ok it's the future, so now Momo has developed into this," but still...

I would love to read how you arrived at this Momo! (and because I am a dork that enjoys reading thoughts like that, regardless ^^)

Oh, and this part keeps echoing in my head: So he got over the disappointment and switched into the track club and made other plans for his life. Good plans.

Somehow the rhythm of these 2 phrases is just perfect. That "good plans" just resonates and seems perfect Kaidoh-voice.